Good try
When I did my Parody of Se7en movie, I put in my own jokes. Like others said, you just went word for word almost from the movie. Look at my movie (not trying to brag or any thing) and try and make it something like that. Use the story line and put your own jokes in there. You can't just sub clocks in for the characters and call it a movie. And get different voices for the clocks. In my Parody of Se7en. They all have a different pitch or tone to their voice to make them different.